Workshop Comments for Classmates

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

14 March 2012

Portfolio Workshop for Paulette

  1. Which 365 posts are most effective? Why?

I feel that the most effective post is the first acrostic poem, “What You Stand For” because it’s full of imagery and I feel it sends a strong message. Also, the explanation of the process reveals the strong voice in the poem. I also feel “A woman?” is effective in the post because it sends a message from the author to all other women and something they all go through. Just like the other poems it has an explanation of the process to help the reader understand the meaning behind it. It also has a unique formatting in the way it appears in a shape rather than just straight lines.

2. Which 365 posts are least effective? Why?

I wouldn’t be able to say which ones are least effective because I’m not string in the poetry field so I wouldn’t know which ones were better than others or which ones fit best.

3. In what ways are these posts connected to what we’ve talked about in class?

We have done poetry in class so that is the connection of what we have discussed or read in text. The artist also mentions the 365 Daily Journal so it is evident that there was influence from texts in class.

4. Give 3-5 suggestions that you’d like to see incorporated in the final project.

The only suggestion I have would be to maybe add visuals for the project.

5. Is evidence (from books we’ve discussed in class or other academic sources) used effectively in the Artist Statement? Why or why not?

Yes, there is a mention of the 365 Daily Journal and there is also mentioned other texts that have an influence on the project. I feel that they are used effectively because they are important to the process of the artist’s work.

6. What area of the Artist Statement is the strongest? Why?

I feel that the strongest part of the artist statement is the first paragraph of The Process because it explains how the artist came up with the idea for the project.

7. Give 3-5 suggestions on how to make the Artist Statement more interesting/useful/informative.

I think it should be longer and have more explanation of the total project. Although if you were to count the process after each poem, this is not needed.

Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

14 March 2012

Portfolio Workshop for Samaria

 Which 365 posts are most effective? Why?

I really don’t know how to evaluate poetry so it is hard for me to say which poems are effective or ineffective for the portfolio. One suggestion would be to have bold headings because all of the poems are just running together in continuation like it is a regular writing with indents.

In what ways are these posts connected to what we’ve talked about in class?

We went over poetry in class so that’s what would be connected to what we’ve learned in class. Another suggestion I have is to include visuals that match the meaning of the poems. I think it could give the reader a better understanding of the poem if they have something to connect the words to.

6. What area of the Artist Statement is the strongest? Why?

I found it most interesting that in your artist statement you said that you got inspiration for your portfolio from watching episodes of “The Last Airbender”. Using the character’s dialogue and the images to portray through poetry is a very unique process to write a poem. I agree with you that it would be difficult for a viewer to understand your work if they were not familiar with the show because I know I have never watched the show. The most effective part of the artist statement is the step by step process that seems to take you through the artist’s mind as if you are doing the work with them. It’s such a thorough and descriptive how-to process that it could also be used for someone else that needs a guide for writing. This part of the artist statement is also the evidence of what we have discussed in class because we devoted a mini project to the How-to format so it is good that it is included. I think to improve the artist statement there could be some kind of separation from the rest of the portfolio work. This could include a heading in bold perhaps, or anything else that indicates the end of the regular posts and the start of the artist statement section to help avoid confusion for the reader.

Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

12 March 2012

Workshop Portfolio for Brandy Adams

  1. Which 365 posts are most effective? Why?

I feel that the most effective post was the “umbrella” artwork that says is inspired by Sylvia Plath’s drawing and poetry. What I enjoy most about this piece is the multiple processes explained that it took to come out with the final product. It has many elements to it such as the water colors, the burning of the paper, the addition of the picture, and the candle burning to hold the picture in place and also provide a color.

2. Which 365 posts are least effective? Why?

I feel that the least effective post is the poem “contravene” only because compared to the other posts it does not stick out as much. When scrolling through the artwork pieces catch my attention but the poem does not as much. There is nothing wrong with the poem but I feel it is least effective in the portfolio compared to the other posts.

3. In what ways are these posts connected to what we’ve talked about in class?

The posts all deal with following a process to create the work. And in this case the process of Sylvia Plath is emulated. We have also talked about different forms in art in class such as painting, poetry, mixed media, etc. and this portfolio project incorporates all of those.
4. Give 3-5 suggestions that you’d like to see incorporated in the final project.

I wouldn’t change anything on the project but a suggestion would be to maybe have a link for what the drawing looked like from the pinterest site that was used for the inspiration of the Lego high heel shoe.

5. Is evidence (from books we’ve discussed in class or other academic sources) used effectively in the Artist Statement? Why or why not?

Yes, there is evidence from things we learned in class in the artist statement. It is the How-To element which the artist explains the process of creating something that is worthy of creation.

6. What area of the Artist Statement is the strongest? Why?

I feel that the strongest part of the artist statement is how the artist explains the process of how they go about their work. It is a thorough explanation that also includes step by step instructions.

Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

12 March 2012

Workshop Portfolio for Lydia Roof

  1. Which 365 posts are most effective? Why?

I think that the posts, “root revival” and “How-To” were the most effective for the fact that they feature before and after pictures as well as a how to. With the blog focusing on hairstyles I feel that it was important to have the before and after effect for the viewer to see. Also with the how-to post it gives the viewer of the blog step by step instructions in case they were interested in altering their hair.
2. Which 365 posts are least effective? Why?

I felt that the least effective post was the triggering town post. There is nothing wrong with it- it just doesn’t match the other posts. Maybe this is because it didn’t have a visual like the other pictures.
3. In what ways are these posts connected to what we’ve talked about in class?

There were posts that connected to texts we read in class like the “triggering town” and also other posts inspired by the work on Professor Parks’ blog as explained in the “H is for Hair” post. The “How-To” post is also strongly influenced by something we learned in class because we dedicated an artist statement and mini-project to this subject.

4. Give 3-5 suggestions that you’d like to see incorporated in the final project.

I think one good change for the final project would be to include before and after pictures on all of the posts so that the viewer can see the full transformation of each hairstyle.
5. Is evidence (from books we’ve discussed in class or other academic sources) used effectively in the Artist Statement? Why or why not?

Yes there is evidence from texts we went over in class because in the artists statement under creative writing, “How to Become a Writer” by Lorrie Moore is mentioned. It is used correctly because she explains what she took from the text and incorporated in her work.
6. What area of the Artist Statement is the strongest? Why?

I feel that the strongest part is how the original and updated artist statements were written. By doing this it shows the progression of the artist over the length of the class.

7. What areas of the Artist Statement need clarification/expansion/correction?

The whole artist statement was thorough and I didn’t need clarification on it.
Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

7 March 2012

Portfolio Workshop for Christian Ellison

            After looking at this portfolio project I felt that the actual songs or posts should be posted on the portfolio page. This would allow the viewer to see exactly what the selected project was without having to change to the home page. I also feel that a visual to go along with each post would bring some light to the meaning of each post for the reader. I see something like a cover art for each post that brings it more to life.

The thing I felt was effective in this portfolio project was the important note introduction that was written at the top of the page. It does a good job to explain to the viewer of the page how the artist came about with the process and reasoning for the overall project theme and each post. I also like the formatting with some of the words italicized and in bold because it puts an emphasis on the particular word and makes you read it differently, with more importance. The explanation of the process relates to something we have done in class because we have spent time going over artists’ creative processes both through texts and art group presentations.

The suggestions I have for the final project would be to write out the song or post and still keep the explanation underneath and add an image with each post similar to cover art seen for albums. For this reason I did not decide on a strongest or least effective post because other than the explanation of the processes for each, they are not visible on the page.

I felt that the artist statement was thorough in explaining the overall process for musicians and then going into more specific detail in the process that the artist uses herself. I felt that it was informative and provided insight to see how the writing of a song comes about. The parenthesized side notes also give more explanation. It appears well organized and it is not necessary to make any drastic changes to it.

Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

7 March 2012

Portfolio Workshop for Brittani Hausenfleck

            I felt that the most effective post fort this final portfolio project was the first one, “Dia de Los Muertos”. I say this because with the theme being the art of hard and soft I felt this captured that the most. I see the art of the skull look and impression of death as the hard part and the alive person’s face underneath as the soft half of the art. That creates a contrast that I think the artist was aiming to go for.

The one post that I felt was least effective was “twins in the darkness”. I felt the other posts were more obvious with the hard and soft theme and this one didn’t match as much. Although I understand the artist has a different process of going about their work that the audience may not always understand.

There are good explanations for every post that explains how it relates to what we’ve discussed in class and I can see the different ideas and processes we have learned portrayed in the work with the artist’s own style. I also felt that there is a good mix of different mediums used in the portfolio project. There is not just one style of art but instead there are paintings, drawings, crafts, photography, and make up art.

I felt that the best part of the artist statement was the first part with the quote from the midterm reflection. Everyone has different points-of-view so it is important that the artist create what they want because two people could see it differently and they shouldn’t be discouraged by what one person says about it. It is important to have diversity among art because there is diversity among people. The rest of the statement is also clarified very well because every process is explained with how and why it came about to the final product we see. I don’t see any necessary changes that need to be changed for the artist statement because I thought it was thorough but proofreading may help in case the artist finds something that they feel can be fixed.

Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

5 March 2012

Workshop for Josh West

            I felt that one of the most effective posts in this portfolio project was the “Story 5” post that involved the son and mother. I especially like this one because within the story it almost switches the roles of the parent. The young boy asks a question with the mindset that his mom has the answers to everything but when she doesn’t have the answer it leaves her as the one in question. And when she doesn’t know she gives the generic parent answer for when they don’t have any justification, “Because”. The boy could also tell that the question affected his mom because he states “Being eight at the time, I couldn’t decipher her equivocating but I knew I had touched a nerve.” I just thought this was the most effective because it’s a short story that relates to the theme of the blog/project but at the same time it is something that most all people could relate to.

The least effective in my opinion was “Story 7” because I didn’t quite understand what it was about or what the message. The writer knows the process for this piece but as a reader I did not catch the intended purpose of it. It is explained in the story overview but in the other short stories I could tell what they were about without having to read the writer’s story overview.

The parts of the portfolio that have been discussed in class is everything that we talked about during the writing section earlier in the year. Also, with each short story having a story overview after to explain the meaning of the story and the creative process connects to when we had learned about different processes when creating our work.

I think in the final project it would be nice to incorporate some type of visual next to each short story. I think that it would give the reader more of a sense of the story.

In the artist statement I feel that there is evidence of what we learned from texts in class because he explains his reasoning. It reminds me of the How-To section. Although not written in a step by step form it is evident that he is explaining how he goes about writing his short stories. I also feel that this introduction where he explains this is the strongest part of the artist statement for the reason he explains the process for this writing.

I felt that the whole artist statement was strong because I could easily follow his whole process and how the writer goes about making his writing pieces so there is not any clarification needed in my opinion.

Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

Kyle McFadden

Professor Parks

XIDS 2100

5 March 2012

Workshop for Kassie Bettis

            After going through the blog and keeping the theme in mind, “this blog is now dedicated to the exploration of Light and Darkness”, I felt that the most effective post was “A juxtaposition of Thought”. I picked this one because it has a focus of opposites in many phases, which contributes to the light and darkness theme. In the picture the top half appears the light and the bottom presents the darkness, where the shadows are cast and everything is black. Those two halves of the image illustrate a nice paradox that was intended to appear like that. Also another part of the image that matches the title is the juxtaposition of the one way streets signs pointing in two different directions. This was the most effective because it captures the theme of the blog in every way possible with paradoxes and opposites that relate to light and dark.

            To me the least effective post was “The Heart on the Square” only because I didn’t see the difference of light and darkness that I could see in the other posts. I’m sure that through the artist’s creative process there was something in it but just to me it didn’t stand out like the other posts.

            The posts in the portfolio are connected to what we have talked about in class because we often have talked about different creative processes that each artist goes through to come out with their final product or piece. Whether it be a writer, musician, painter, etc. there was a certain set of steps and reason for creating their art. In each of the posts the reason for it and the creative process are explained which connects it to what we have read in some of the texts in class and also some of the group presentations of art subjects.

            I like the overall idea of the project so I wouldn’t want to change anything but if I had to make a suggestion it would be to include a different medium other than solely photography (although there is no problem with that, but I had to make a suggestion for the final).

            When it comes to the artist statement I felt that the strongest part of it was the paragraph that started “Fuck People” and went on to explain how you can’t focus on what others think when you are creating your craft. I felt that was important/ strong because that is usually when the creativity is lost, by assimilating work for others rather than producing what you want for yourself.

            The part that needed clarification for me was how the artist statement was connected to the portfolio project. The artist statement was about being a writer but there were no writing pieces in the project. That was the only part that confused me. Otherwise I like how it was set up with steps and directions.

Questions to ask:

1)      How did you come up with this idea for your blog/ project?

2)      Is it difficult to find new 3 new projects to complete every week?

3)      Looking back would you have tried a different theme or topic for your blog/ project?

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